Wednesday, November 26, 2008

Genie of Genies- Chapter 1

Nehemiah is writing a book and wanted to share some of it here. Below is the first chapter. Leave a comment and let him know what you think!

Chapter one-

The rain is pouring in a dark valley. At least it was for the boy on Cherry Lane. This boys name was Koa Buckley Maine. Weird. That’s what your thinking. Well you’re just like Koa. He thought that any other name was better than Koa. So Koa prefers being called Buckley or Buck for short(so we will call him that). Buck was tall and skinny, had freckles on his face. He didn’t have many friends and was lonely.

Today was actually warm and bright in Elko, Nevada. But Buck did not care because he was always inside. What he did inside is what you are doing right now. Reading. Buck did not want to go outside and play ball with friends. He couldn’t because he had no friends. Now my dad would say “Then go and make friends!”

But Buck did not have a father like mine. His father was always away on business trips. But he still had a mother that loved him.

Today for some reason Buck was unusually tired. So sometimes he would nod off into sleep as he read. Then a disturbing noise filled the air. The noise was coming from his bedroom. Buck put his book down and walked quietly to his bedroom. What was the noise? He walked into his room and discovered the 'thing' that was making the noise. It was... the telephone. Boy was he relieved that it was that. Buck answered the phone and was surprised that the person on the other line was his father.

“Is mom home?” Said Bucks father.

“No she is at that club she goes to.” Said Buck.
Bucks father said something off the line.

“What did you say, Dad?”

“Nothing. Any way tell your mom to call me tonight.”

Beep! Bucks father had hung up.

Did Bucks father love his own son? Did he even care? It was just Buck's mom and he. They were all alone in the world. So now Buck sat down in his chair and started to read. But he didn’t read very long until the phone rang again. Buck answered.

“Go get your mother.”

“Hello… Hello?” Said Buck
The Caller had hung up.


Liliana and Lutfi Siyam said...

Wow, this is great Nehemiah! I'm ready for what's next!

Lauren said...

Nehemiah- I liked your first chapter. You used a lot of great writing techniques that kept me interested in the story. I'm curious to see what happens next...

N.T.Jordan said...

Thank you for the great comments.

Chris Jordan said...